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I just got my new goldfish, Goldy. He was very excited and jumpy. It looked like he could jump over a tall ladder. I did not want to loose my fish if he flew out of his bowl. I thought I was taking good care of him until I saw the brown murky water. I forgot to clean the water and the bowl! No wonder Goldy looked so sick. He started slowly turning upside down and I knew he was gone. I was a horrible fish owner. next time I will just get a hamster.

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  1. Gill E2 March 2018 at 12:25

    Your story moves so fast from one scene to another, you need to slow down and explain what is happening in between the big events. Try to have a clear introduction so the reader can sink into what is going on.

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