100 WC Week 6

"Splash!" I heard as my clumsy friend John flew into the murky shallow pond. I could see the bottom of the water. John's boots were sticking out of the pond. I waited for him to climb out of the water but when he didn't I realized  he was stuck in all of the debris. I immediately jumped in the pond to save him. When I looked around I couldn't see him anywhere. But when I turned around I saw john in the back of a car speeding away. from this day I have never seen John again. 

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  1. Unknown18 October 2017 at 21:30

    What a friend, I wouldn't see him ever again either. Great job starting of with a sound effect to grab the readers attention. Well done. Be sure to check over your writing right to the end as you are missing some capitals. Some commas would also help your sentences read smoothly too.

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